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i really need your help. i must write a 5 pages lenght story using as much passive voice structures as possible. i have no idea of how to do that. i dont know what to write about. please, give my the start of the story.. or maybe there are a person with a golden heart, who could write it for me.. i will be thankful for the rest of my life :??
 
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As a matter of fact, I do have a golden heart, and that is why I will tell you that you must write your own story. Because if I were to do it, the next time you'd encounter the dreaded passive voice, you would be just as helpless as you now feel. But if you do it yourself, well, hey! you'll never need to fear the passive voice again!

In the passive voice, the subject is ACTED UPON.

e.g. The turnips were thrown off the wagon.

Compare this with the active voice, where the subject ACTS.

e.g. The farmer's daughter threw the turnips off the wagon.

And it's incredibly easy to write a story in the passive voice. In fact, professional writers are always checking their work to change passive to active, because the active style is said to add a sense of energy to the writing.

I don't mind suggesting a topic for your 5-page story, though.

Describe a busy day in the life of the farmer's daughter. Begin with fetching the cows from the pasture and then milking them by hand, because the milking machines didn't work because of a power interruption.

End with her falling asleep with her face in her dinnerplate because she is so tired.

Remember:

"The cows were fetched before 5:00 A.M....", not "Betty Lou fetched the cows before 5:00 A.M."

And end it:

"Her face was covered in ketchup and baked beans. But it was licked clean by Pal, her faithful collie."

Don't like that storyline? Good. Invent a better one.
 
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